It's too hot here for snuggling. The wife and I are currently only showing affection with polite nods from across the room, until the temperature falls at least to under 40.
This is the most humorous chapter of the game so far, I'd say, but at the same time still creepy. How amusing and surprising that Nuppeppo is like an emotional support animal!
One bit of criticism--you use references to "The Itsy Bitsy Spider," but I think you are more than creative enough to leave them out. Your story is, to me, unique, and the quotes from the nursery rhyme did not enhance your strong writing.
I adore this story, but WHERE IS THe WHIMSY
Come on, you can not deny this is the most whimsy so far. The undead horror loves cucumbers?
The meat creature just wants to cuddle?
Teenage Yokai Sumo Turtles?
The spider is a little lady?
The horror narrator encouraging healthy catharsis?
How can I ever build up my whimsy quota if I never get cumulative credits?
I will give you the VERY brief cucumber scene. That’s IT.
I need you to pull an Asteria and snuggle with your wife to get more happy cozy vibes flowing 😤😤
It's too hot here for snuggling. The wife and I are currently only showing affection with polite nods from across the room, until the temperature falls at least to under 40.
I’ve never done this before, but I think I might need to encourage you to stop writing until you have snuggles again 😩😩😩
I can't stop writing. My meat baby needs me!
😩😩😩
This is the most humorous chapter of the game so far, I'd say, but at the same time still creepy. How amusing and surprising that Nuppeppo is like an emotional support animal!
One bit of criticism--you use references to "The Itsy Bitsy Spider," but I think you are more than creative enough to leave them out. Your story is, to me, unique, and the quotes from the nursery rhyme did not enhance your strong writing.
Thank you so much for that valid criticism. I've been on the fence about that gag as well, so your thoughts on it are exactly what I needed.