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Iva Levarre's avatar

I'm rivited on this story. Again, part of the appeal is the personal narration style. In this chapter it is strongest when the narrator remarks: "The pain must have been immense, but Seimei did not scream or flinch the way you are flinching now." I was flinching at that very moment. There is a magic in feeling that the narrator is beside me telling the story and even noticing my reactions to it.

Whimsy & Woe's avatar

Thank you again for the lovely comment. Would you mind terribly if I restacked it? I would like to get more people reading this story, so far it is averaging a lot less readers than my other stuff.

Iva Levarre's avatar

Restack away!

Whimsy & Woe's avatar

That makes me so happy. I am really loving this style also. It feels more personal, even as I'm writing it.

Anoushka's avatar

the writing is so captivating and addictive and I'm loving it so so much!!! also i know the spider is supposed to be sort of grotesque with EIGHT whole eyes, but she sounds so cute to me 🥹

Whimsy & Woe's avatar

Have you ever seen a jumping spider? They are incredibly adorable!

Anoushka's avatar
6dEdited

THEY ARE! they always make me think of charlotte from charlotte's web ❤️

Happy Nielsen's avatar

I feel like I should have been warned about the eye spider 😩

I am really enjoying this story though, despite that 😂💚

Whimsy & Woe's avatar

But she's so cute! You'll grow to love her.

Iva Levarre's avatar

What inspired this story, if you do not mind sharing?

Whimsy & Woe's avatar

I lived in Japan for a year, and I really loved their folklore and their ancient version of fairy tales. Their stories were often creepy but somehow also lovely. I wanted to write something like that.

Iva Levarre's avatar

Thank you for sharing! I have read some amazing Japanese fairy tales, such as Urashimataro and the Turtle, The Sparrow with the Slit Tongue, The Cat’s Elopement. They do read very differently than Grimm or Andersen.